In The Dark
BLACKOUT!!!!! OH SNAP ! A stormy rainy dark day in Mexico i was frighten. It was a vacation I really didn't come to Mexico to be stuck in the house. I really thought i would be outside near the pool or river getting some sun. But no it was a bad time. When it rains in Mexico it rains. I looked outside and the so called street we walked on looked like a weird brown dirty river was passing by. I thought the houses were going to sink.
I was in the home of my grandparents they were so chill having some Mexican bread with some Mexican creamy hot chocolate. While i was panicking about the rain they told me to relax its just rain but it was nothing like i was use to, it never have rained hard in Alameda like it was here. BOOM thunder bright flashing lighting LIGHTS WENT OUT pitch dark i couldn't see anything the thunder so loud and sounding so powerful. My grandma told me we are going to be out of light for awhile. Go outside to your abuela Flor's old house next door. I couldn't say no to my grandma so here i go leaving threw the back door passing my the corral and into my great grandmothers house. Super dark no light and to top it off i had no flashlight that was what i had to look for and some candles.
I never really like going to my abulea Flor's house because she died there i never went in by myself but hey, theres a first time for everything. When i opened the door a rush of cold air went by me goose bumps. My grandma told me that the candles would be in my great grandmothers room in the dresser right next to her bed. I walked slowly with my wet shoes thinking i could fall the floor felt a bit slippery i used my hands so they can guide me the walls felt rough. I knew from where i entered was the back door which goes into the kitchen i touched the sink making sure i was where i thought i was i guided my way to finding the hall way OUCH i kind of almost fell it was a disturbing annoying trashcan that hit the floor hard. I stumbled a bit i picked the metal can up. I was in the hall way i knew from the hall way their were two doors you could go in to enter a room. But i remember my abulea Flor's room door had a type of Burgundy silky drape. I check to the right it wasn't it i felt a cold door knob.I swinged my hand to the my left, felt like silk this was it i walked in.
I tripped and stumbled a few times but in one of those i felt a bed frame in the dark her room seemed huge but it wasn't. Once i felt the wood bed frame i came around felt the cotton sheets i remember the last time i saw them they were light pink beautiful. I went towards the front I felt the dresser i opened it and i think i made a mess in there because i moved me hands back and forth trying to feel for a candle or a flashlight. I had to go way in there to be able to find candle sticks i felt the sticks waxy. I found the candle stands they were metal i knew they where because i felt the hole where the candle goes it was hard and cold. Next i found the big fat flashlight.
I hurried up and turned it on i was tired and so puzzled in being in the dark kind of frustrated. I lighted the room up looked around and I noticed that the room looked the same as it always does exactly the way my abulea Flor left it. I walked away flashing my way threw with the illuminated flashlight. I went back to my grandmother dark house she was waiting for me at the door she told me,” good you found them i was going to go in there and help you you took kind of long.” Having light or at least a couple of candles and a flashlight was better than nothing. I was glad when the lights came on which seemed like a century later. What a vacation i thought wood be bright and shiny :)
First of all...PARAGRAPHS. Can't give you credit for this until it's broken down into paragraphs. Think about where you would stop to take a little pause if you were telling the story out loud...where the story needs to "breathe." Like when you go into a different room, or where you have conversations with your grandma. All these sections should be in different paragraphs. (Didn't we talk about this in the lab the other day?)
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